DS...need direction

P-salms · October 20, 2011, 4:26pm

interested in whether or not content has potential to make a decent DS.

For many Black Americans, the question of, “what does it mean to be Black?” is perhaps the most important question that will be posed in regards to their identity formation. Black consciousness is nothing new and is especially captivating when dealing with Blacks’ attitudes towards racial identity. As a first generation African in America, defining racial identity in terms of the Black experience has always been an uphill struggle. For the most part, I have struggled to take ownership of an identity that, to me, imposes itself from an outside subculture. I have always viewed Black identity in the context of the Black experience- as a composite creation of multiple generations attempting to cast themselves from the shadows of slavery. My version of the Black experience is tied to pre-civil rights sensibilities.

thelawschoolproject · October 20, 2011, 11:09pm

It seems as if your DS wouldn’t be focused on you, but rather deconstructionist ideals of racial identity. And, while this would make a good paper, I don’t think your DS is where you want to bring up those issues unless you’re discussing your personal identity and its construction in your life.

P-salms · October 21, 2011, 2:34pm

I definitely see where you’re coming from. So would you suggest scrapping the whole premise? Anyone else feel free to chime in..Thanks in advance

system · October 21, 2011, 2:49pm

My impression is that your DS is going to include a lot of BS.

P-salms · October 21, 2011, 2:53pm

haha, what gives you that impression?

system · October 21, 2011, 2:56pm

The sample introductory paragraph included in the post starting this thread—especially the last two sentences.

P-salms · October 21, 2011, 2:58pm

so you’re leaning towards scrap the whole thing? Any constructive suggestions? Thanks btw

system · October 21, 2011, 3:00pm

The last two sentences are overly broad. Try refining your DS to focus on you. How are you diverse & how has being diverse affected you ?

theadvancededit · October 21, 2011, 4:41pm

Describing your diverse experience from an academic standpoint can work, but you have to be careful not to stray from the main topic-- you.

P-salms · October 24, 2011, 12:25am

would anyone of you care to review my PS?

thelawschoolproject · October 24, 2011, 4:20am

PM it to me and I’ll look it over.

BlakcMajikc · October 24, 2011, 9:50am

P-salms:

interested in whether or not content has potential to make a decent DS.

For many Black Americans, the question of, “what does it mean to be Black?” is perhaps the most important question that will be posed in regards to their identity formation. Black consciousness is nothing new and is especially captivating when dealing with Blacks’ attitudes towards racial identity. As a first generation African in America, defining racial identity in terms of the Black experience has always been an uphill struggle. For the most part, I have struggled to take ownership of an identity that, to me, imposes itself from an outside subculture. I have always viewed Black identity in the context of the Black experience- as a composite creation of multiple generations attempting to cast themselves from the shadows of slavery. My version of the Black experience is tied to pre-civil rights sensibilities.

These are the only two sentences with usable content in this paragraph. Use the potential from these two and try again.