Thanks for the feedback, folks. Much appreciated.
DELETE: “I demand answers.”
Why use semi-colons in the first paragraph ?
ADD: “my” to make “…captured my every movement…”.
The final sentence is weak.
Thank you. Any other feedback?
Thanks for the feedback, folks. Much appreciated.
DELETE: “I demand answers.”
Why use semi-colons in the first paragraph ?
ADD: “my” to make “…captured my every movement…”.
The final sentence is weak.
Thank you. Any other feedback?