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kemaeng · February 27, 2012, 10:17pm

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system · February 27, 2012, 10:23pm

“I completed”, not “I have taken”.

“underage”, not “under age”.

“It”, not “I was dismissed”.

DELETE: The last two sentences of the second paragraph.

mtyler19 · February 27, 2012, 10:26pm

I don’t really know how to fix this sentence but if you want to keep “ever since the incident” it should be “I have not driven…”
I think I’d word it differently, like “I havent driven under the influence since.”
or just take it out, because if you had you most likely would have two DUIs

kemaeng · February 27, 2012, 10:28pm

Thanks for the tip. If I do delete the last two sentences of the second paragraph, how am I to show what I have learned?

system · February 27, 2012, 10:29pm

As written, your addendum suggests that you have graduated from alcohol to marijuana.

T00L · February 27, 2012, 10:29pm

kemaeng:

hello. I have an embarrassing addendum that I am obligated to disclose. Please view and tell me what you think…

In August of 2005 I was arrested for under age DUI in the state of New Jersey. I have taken a 12 hours Alcohol Education Class and served a 150 hours of community service in a public library. The decision to drink under the legal age and drive is amongst the worst of my life. Ever since the incident, I have never drove behind the wheel under the influence.

In May of 2011 I was arrested for possession of Marijuana. I was dismissed on February 21, 2012. My poor decision to engage in this reckless action will daunt me for years to come. Even though I haven’t paid any fines or was placed on probation, I made a commitment to inform many people around me to never make the mistakes that I have made.

Were you high when you wrote this?

chem · February 27, 2012, 10:33pm

Delete all but the first two sentences of each paragraph really. Law schools don’t care, as long as there isnt a long string of repeat offenses. They just want you to disclose