Thanks for your help, gertie! 
Wow. Very impressive and moving personal statement. It will defiantly paint a picture to them regarding what you are capable of. This is not an application that they would be likely to forget.
Suggestion: I liked that you mentioned you first interaction with lawyers and that it was negative. You may want to build on that some and describe how that led you to apply to Law School. That could add to your interesting background and perspective.
Thanks for your input. It is currently longer that two pages. How would you suggest placing that addition 
Maybe somewhere after this section sentence “Since that time, I have been passionate about the effect that laws have on economically disadvantaged families.” If you are already over 2 pages, just a mention of a “This is when I started considering law school” type sentence would be enough to bridge the gap